Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a common belief that rapid
expansion
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of
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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in some countries, many small, local
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business
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businesses
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are able to compete and local
business
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will bring about the
develop
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development
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of local communities.
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, I firmly believe that
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expansion
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brings threats
for
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to
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local
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business
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businesses
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instead
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in stead
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instead
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of chances.
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with,
supermarket
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expansion
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provide
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more choices for local consumers, which means local
business
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have more competitor.
Supermarket
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usually
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built in a large area
with
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on
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a huge scale and consumer benefits a lot from it. They have more
choice
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choices
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from all over the world with import
products
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or high-end brands that
never
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appear
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before. And local brands
also
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have more
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competitors
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, which
are have
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a huge
of
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investment from rich people all over the country. Making small
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business
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businesses
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are downsizing their scale to
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efficiently. According to a recent survey in
Donghoi
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Donghai
, a small city in Vietnam, the appearance of a huge mall
that
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apply
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makes the revenues of traditional
market
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markets
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and
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business
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businesses
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decreased
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up to 15
percent
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. Clearly that if
small
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business
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does not do anything, they can
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in the future. On top of that,
consumer
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consumers
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have a tendency to
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products
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from
big
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the big
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company
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companies
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rather than small
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business
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businesses
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. Since the
third
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industrial revolution,
products
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are being
shiped
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shipped
from all around the world.
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, globalization makes individuals generally want to buy
an
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international
products
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or even
products
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that
made
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by giant
exclusively
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company.
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, Laotian are usually attended by import
products
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. They worship it and the result
are
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their local or small company decline
revenues
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in revenues
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significantly.
This
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a
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popular example
about
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of
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the fame of big
coperations
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corporations
. To sum up,
supermarket
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expansion
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providing
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provides
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more choices for
consumer
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the consumer
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and their fame
also
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catching
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catches
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customers
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customers'
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attention. For these reasons, it is clear that the
expansion
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of
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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brings the death of
local
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a local
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business
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businesses
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic benefits
  • community identity
  • personalized customer service
  • strong relationships
  • wide variety of goods
  • lower prices
  • community spirit
  • local events
  • sponsorships
  • cultural heritage
  • homogenize
  • logistics
  • carbon footprint
  • inequality
  • low-income individuals
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