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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

#technology #people #viewpoints
These days, many new
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 to be significant and affect our lives. Some argue that it has split us apart. While others believe that today’s technologies have brought
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 closer. Personally, I believe that there are numerous apply these devices. In the
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 I will analyse both perspectives and conclude with my own opinion.
To begin
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benefits for our society. Gadgets
such
 as smartphones, laptops and computers make our life easier.
First
 of all, it provides an opportunity for us to interact with other people, which can contact family or friends rapidly. To explain, if we live in a different country and far from family, we can use a smartphone to call someone that we have missed.
Second
, students can learn online and find some interesting things, which provide them with the horizon of education.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks to concern.
Firstly
, many young people nowadays are easily attracted by advanced devices, which make them addicted and do not tend to participate with their family as much as they should.
Secondly
, teenagers access the internet or social media by themselves with ignorance, some media lead to violence and no morals.
In addition
 to dealing with
this
 issue, parents should advise them and teach them the right way. In summary, it is undeniable that many gadgets or modern technologies help
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 a lot in communication. But there are some negatives, which are that parents should be concerned and need to look after their children more. In my opinion, the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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