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Transnationalism is the new way to look at the migrant experience which can help both migrants and local communities.

Nowadays, there are
migrants
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 in every
country
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 and
transnationalism
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 isn'
t
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 something new for the
people
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. The foreigners blend in with the society and I believe there is a powerful exchange between them and the locals. To start with,
migrants
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 don'
t
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 cut out their relationships in their home
country
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. They keep communicating with friends and relatives using technology.
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,
migrants
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 can watch news and films in their own language without any effort
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 way,
people
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 don'
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 lose connection with their background and culture.
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,
migrants
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 often don'
t
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 have their roots and traditions and local
people
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 experience positive cultural exchange. The role of
transnationalism
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 is enormous, as it shows that foreigners don'
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 only take from their host
country
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 but
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 give.
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 makes communication between different
people
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 easier.
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, a lot of citizens are concerned that
transnationalism
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 can lead to the isolation of
migrants
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.
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, some of them can create groups wthatddon'twant to be part of the
country
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's life.
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,
people
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 from different places can integrate fully into the host society which will bring only positive effects. Despite the fact that there are some concerns about
transnationalism
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, I believe that
people
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 will feel confident wherever they live.

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