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The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

#cars #people #reason
There is no denying the fact that
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cars are necessary
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 our life,
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although
it
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cause
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 many
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troubles
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 I will explain the
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problems
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 of
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To begin
 with,
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, it is
commenly
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commonly
 known that the number of
acciednt
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accident
accidents
 still increase until these days because
majority
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 of driver
are
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 using mobile phones when they drive.
onther
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other
 point to consider is traffic
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 which always made us late for work in the morning and
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,
additionaly
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additionally
additional
 for the
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population
 as we know the cars are the biggest source
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 the atmospheric .
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,Secondly
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 we need
raising
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people
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 awareness about not using a mobile phone when they drive.
more over
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moreover
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, the government should encourage citizens to ride public
transportion
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transportation
 which could not only
dicrease
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decrease
increase
 the accident and traffic but
also
 the
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pollution
. In conclusion, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that we can not
discourge
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discourage
 people
of
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for
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 not using
there
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their
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 one
cars
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car
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, but with
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each other
eachother
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,eachother
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 we can solve
this
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problem
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simple
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 solution.
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