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The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

#cars #people #reason
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There is no denying the fact that
the
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cars are necessary
in
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for
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 our life,
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although
it
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they
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cause
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causes
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 many
trubles
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troubles
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this
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essay
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 I will explain the
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problems
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number
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 of
solution
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To begin
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, it is
commenly
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commonly
 known that the number of
acciednt
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accident
accidents
 still increase until these days because
majority
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 of driver
are
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 using mobile phones when they drive.
onther
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other
 point to consider is traffic
jam
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jams
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 which always made us late for work in the morning and
appointment
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,
additionaly
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additionally
additional
 for the
pouliotion
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population
 as we know the cars are the biggest source
on
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 the atmospheric .
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Secondly
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,Secondly
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 we need
raising
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people
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people's
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 awareness about not using a mobile phone when they drive.
more over
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moreover
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, the government should encourage citizens to ride public
transportion
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transportation
 which could not only
dicrease
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decrease
increase
 the accident and traffic but
also
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 the
pouliution
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pollution
. In conclusion, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that we can not
discourge
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discourage
 people
of
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for
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 not using
there
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their
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 one
cars
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car
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, but with
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each other
eachother
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,eachother
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 we can solve
this
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proplem
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problem
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simple
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a simple
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 solution.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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