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Friendly robots are currently being developed to help people at work and at home. Do you think that the positive consequence of this outweighs the negative ones. justify your answer and include relevant exmaples from your knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, technology is changing at an alarming rate due to which friendly
cyborgs
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 are in trend to make
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people
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life
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 easier.
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 these
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 machines
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 a pivotal role in making the
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 faster and
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,
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 on the downside it leads to colossal loss of human jobs and health problems. In my opinion, the positive aspects
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precedence over the drawbacks.
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 of the major drawbacks of using robots at
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 is that it will result in
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 of jobs
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 the
people
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 used to do.
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 to do more
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work
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 in comparison to
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 and it enhances
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productivity.
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, a lot of waiters has lost their job in Japan, after
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 of
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 in the hospitality sector.
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,
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 machine usage at home will lead to a surge in their dependency and it will make
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humans
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 less proactive.
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, due to
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the sedentary
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lifestyle
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life
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style
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will result in numerous health disorders among them.
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 , one of the greatest benefits of using
cyborgs
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 at
work
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 is that it will make it
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faster and efficient.
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 is because these
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 machines can do
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 for straight seven days
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a week and without a single vacation in a year
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humans
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. To illustrate,
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research concluded that using robots
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 of
humans
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 the
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 tenfold and
it
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will eventually
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the
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productivity at
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, their usage
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 house chores
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 bots will make
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people
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life
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 easier and there will be no need to employ maids to do
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 of jobs. In conclusion,
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 there are a few disadvantages regarding the usage of friendly
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 in
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people
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 lives, there are a plethora of advantages that
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 the drawbacks. Personally, I believe that robots can play
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people
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life
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 better at
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 and
home
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at home
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.

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