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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of high school students having part-time Jobs. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own Knowledge or experience.

It is considered that allowing
children
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 to have part-
time
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 jobs is the best option.In my opinion,I think that providing some jobs for
students
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 who are studying in a high
school
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 has both benefits and drawbacks.The following cases and examples below will help support my point of view.
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,there are various advantages to having a
job
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 while they are studying.
Firstly
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,they will completely receive experience before having a permanent
job
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 in the future.
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,they have opportunities to learn something new out of
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 and have more responsibility in their later life.Kids are able to manage their
time
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 for studying and working at the same
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.For
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 reason,
students
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 become more mature than those who only study in a
school
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.On top of that,they will gain wages if they work a part-
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job
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,so they can utilize
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 money for their family or themselves.
Students
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 may reward themselves by purchasing anything that they really want.Taking Thailand as an example,most
children
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 have temporary jobs
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 as cashiers and waiters in restaurants.
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,they have a chance to learn about the computer system,how to take care of customers and offer a good service.
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,working a part-
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job
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 not only does it provide experience but
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 increases their responsibility.
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,there are some disadvantages why
children
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 have not permitted to work a temporary
job
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 when they are studying in a secondary
school
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.One way is that
students
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 may lack concentration in the class and only focus on working.Some
children
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 cannot manage their
time
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,so it has detrimental effects on them
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 as stress and anxiousness.For
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 reason,it will damage their health including physical and mental health which are caused by
children
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's behaviour.
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,kids lack exercise because they have to study and work without having sufficient
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 to relax. In conclusion,having a part-
time
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job
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 may provide both pros and cons.In my view,I believe that it is definitely based on
children
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's attitudes and responsibilities.The cases and examples above have supported my point of view.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work experience
  • time management
  • responsibility
  • customer service
  • financial independence
  • financial responsibility
  • parental support
  • value of money
  • work ethic
  • disciplined
  • dedicated
  • academic performance
  • balancing responsibilities
  • decline
  • limited leisure time
  • extracurricular activities
  • hobbies
  • socializing
  • personal development
  • stress
  • fatigue
  • demands
  • schoolwork
  • well-being
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