some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

It has been observed by many countries that nowadays, a majority of people have
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of
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health
problems regarding fast
food
.
Therefore
they think that the government should put a high price
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text
tax
on these
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types
of
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food
.I would agree with
such
an opinion to a large extent and the reason for my stand will be elaborated
further
.
To begin
with, why fast
food
is
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dangerous for us, to answer
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, it is
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main cause of obesity.To explain it, nowadays many adults along with children have extra weight, due to
everyon
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everyone
has a
habits
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of
junkfood
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junk food
like pizza,burger,beverage.
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every
funcation
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function
,wedding or party they eat these types of foods
,
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and do not have a healthy routine exercise,gym,walk.Through it the lots of weight increase day by day.
For example
,the data revealed by WHO(world health organization) 70% of
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are suffering
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from
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form
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from
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obesity.
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,
the
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another
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one
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effect is the
harmfull
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harmful
disease.To explicate it, these types of
food
makes
disease
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such
a
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cencer
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cancer
centre
,blood pressure,
skin
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problems.
Also
, It has
found
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that fast foods brands like pizza
hurt
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hut
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, subway,they
not put
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a
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fresh ingredients in
food
.
Hence
, it can damage our organs.
For instance
,in 2020, in India rate was founded in
burgerking's
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burger king's
burger kings
burger.
On the other hand
,
some times
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fast
food
makes us happy.To
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it, we eat a simple feed our
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daily
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life
lives
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, so we get tired with
this
routine .
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in
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once a month pizza and
burger
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burgers
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make us happy.So, sometimes individuals can eat fast foods
instead
of
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regular
feed
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. In conclusion, it is true that in recent times
junkfood
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junk food
is our favourite.But we cannot ignore the sides effects of it,it has lots of bad
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.We should eat it very less.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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