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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It has been observed by many countries that nowadays, a majority of people have a lot of health problems regarding fast
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 they think that the government should put a high price text on these types of a meal.I would agree with
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danger
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, it is the main cause of obesity.To explain it, nowadays many adults along with children have extra weight, due to everyone has a habit of junk
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 a pizza,burger,beverage.
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 every function,wedding or party they eat these types of foods
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and do not have a healthy routine like exercise,gym,walk.Through it the lots of weight increase day by day.
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,the data revealed by WHO(world health organization) 70% of Americans are suffering from obesity.
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, the foremost one is effect is the harmful disease.To explicate it, these types of cuisine makes diseases
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 as cancer,blood pressure, and skin problems.
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, It has been found that brands like pizza hut, subway,they are not put fresh ingredients in
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, it can damage our organs.
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,in 2020, in India rate was founded on burger king burgers.
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, sometimes fast
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 makes us happy.To elaborate
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, we eat a simple feed our daily lives, so we get tired
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 once a month pizza and burgers make us happy.So, sometimes individuals can eat fast foods
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 of regular meals.
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,In Canada,60% of folk eat outside only at weekends. In conclusion, it is true that in recent times junk
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 is our favourite.But I believe that we cannot ignore the sides effects of it,it has lots of bad impacts.We should eat it very less.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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