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The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#government #course #fees #study #university
Free tertiary education for everyone has been
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 subject for debating. While a number of people argue that all students with any financial levels should be entailed the right to go to university,
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the
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, others opine that it may have disadvantages. I will explain
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 I approve the
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 statement are more wrong in my opinion. To commence, there are some
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 reasons why many individuals are against
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that it seems beneficial.
First
 and foremost, as the authority budget is limited, and the
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expences
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 of running
univercities
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universities
 are so much
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 if all
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scholars
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the scholars
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 do not spend any fee, the quality of lessons,
foods
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 and other facilities
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definitely
 will be lowered through the years. In the other words, affording
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 will be
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impossible
 unless continuing with minimum quality.
For instance
, in
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most
of
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the
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developing countries with state
univercity
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university
, dormitories, meals served at
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universities
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, as the
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, are
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inappropriate
 and unhealthy.
In addition
,
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 have proved that learners
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 do not allocate money for their education, intend to do not
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consider
considered
 serious in their classes.
For example
, they are
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underrepresented
 in their courses and hardly
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collaborate
collaborated
 with their educators.
However
, a number of
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critics
criticises
 debate that
this
 trend
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 to
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 a gap between poor and wealthy demographics. To clarify, children that were born in families with high incomes can pursue their
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in
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 higher levels,
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whereas
 poor ones' offsprings are
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 deprived. As a consequence,
this
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 the community
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the
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vacious
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vicious
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 cycle, affluents may become more wealthy day by they and the
poors
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poor
 , in reverse,
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. In conclusion, there are several reasons to shed
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lights
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 on the demerits of the no-paid education
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approach
, which surely outweighed the
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merit
merits
 of it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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