A friend of yours recently gave you a nice birthday present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – thank her for the present and say why you particularly like it – describe some other presents that you received – explain some of the things you did on your birthday

#friend #birthday

Hi bestie! How are you doing? I hope you are doing great. I'm grateful for your prize. I love it very much. I'm really happy because your prize was unforgettable. Nowadays, I'm looking for a big and comfortable bag for me.

However

, I haven't found it yet. Your bsg is special for me. I can carry .y everything,

for example

: my big books and laptop with me.

Then

I can go everywhere with

this

bag because it is very beautiful and modern. You saw I had a lot of guests and

prizes

but I don't have a lot of time to unpacking all

prizes

. I was unpacked some

prizes

and

also

liked them. They are: money,jewelry and gadgets for my smartphone and thanks to everybody for

prizes

. I like jewelries so I wear they and they fit me. After you come back to your home I danced with my girls and we ate cake. Thank you very much for the prize and visit to my part. See you soon again. Go'zal

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task achievement

Try to elaborate more on the presents you received. Maybe describe them briefly or mention who gave them to you.

coherence cohesion

Some sentences could be clearer. Consider breaking down long sentences and using connectors more effectively.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are well done, creating a friendly and personal tone.

suitable writing tone

The letter is polite and expresses gratitude effectively.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

172 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

cherished memory
symbolic gesture
personal growth
unique qualities
unwavering support
profound impact
joy and prosperity
treasured moments
heartfelt wishes
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