Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete. Some people thought that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree??

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A lot of small businesses have been closing down because of the inability to compete with large shopping centres. some public argues that without local businesses and local communities will not exist. In my opinion, even though the regional enterprises will bring some difficulties to the local community, it will not endanger their existence.
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, supermarkets and shopping malls are expanding a lot in all cities and towns.most of the public are interested to go shopping plazas
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of going to local shops because it saves time and it is easy to buy and they give more offers and benefits to the products.
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,supermarkets are sent groceries and provisions without going we can book on our mobile phones.
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,it is more flexible to go and shop in supermarkets.
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, Dmart,and big bazaar shopping centre give more items at discount prices public save their income by buying these shopping market.
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, citizens are showing more interest to go shopping in plazas
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of going to local communities because people love to travel to these places and enjoy their shopping. In fact, in the current ,society people prefer to buy items with these places offer many restaurants,movie theatres and playing activities to enjoy.
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,cheap transports are available to go to nearby shopping malls.
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,reliance store offers provisions, clothes and they have electrical equipment
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the public is more interested to go buy all the items in one place. In conclusion,
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the closure of regional shops may affect the local population negatively to a small extent, it will not threaten their existence.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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