The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now
These maps presented what's the centre of the small
town
Islip
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is now and its construction planning
in
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for
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the future.
Overall
, there will be more buildings in the north of the
town
, and the original main
road
will be displaced into a pedestrian crossing,
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of the architecture will be surrounded by a new circle
road
. Now, there is the main
road
going through the centre of the
town
, and there are department stores on the two sides of the
road
. The government is planning to build a bus station, shopping centre, car park, and new housing on the north side of the main
road
. And so the main
road
will be only used by pedestrians, cars are no longer allowed to enter in. They are projecting to build a dual-carriageway for car use, which will connect the school, housing and park in the south part of the
town
. It can be expected that there will be more housing buildings in the circle of the carriageway,
thus
, people living here can hang out in the park which is close to those apartments. In the north of
this
town
, the countryside will be developed and become a part of the
town
.
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