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You needed some help with your garden a few weeks ago. It had too many weeds and insects, and your flowers were dying. You went to a local Garden Centre for help. The salesperson was very helpful, and now your garden looks much better. Write an email to the manager and Describe the salesperson who helped you. Explain what the salesperson did for you and Describe the positive results from the salesperson’s advice.

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Dear Manager, I am writing to draw your attention to an extraordinary customer service experience received at Marpole Garden Centre two weeks ago. My name is Helen, a resident of Orion Houses, located directly across the Center. As my kids love
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, my yard is full of a variety of them
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 as tulips, roses, and margaritas. Unfortunately, it has been affected by several bugs and insects lately, they were almost dying.
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, I went to the centre looking for advice from any of your experts, Mary. She is the nicest salesperson I have ever met; she was extremely helpful and provided me with the best recommendations to save my
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. Allow me to explain what she did for me.
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organic medicine and nutrients were provided by Mary to support my plants.
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, I received tips about the proper way to look after my
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 like how to protect them from insects and how much water they require.
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, my
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 not only did not die, but
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 my yard is more gorgeous now. In fact, my plants are growing faster and healthier than before. I sincerely appreciate the wonderful help received from Mary. Regards, Helen Lee

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Your email is structured well and communicates your appreciation effectively.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • knowledgeable
  • expertise
  • friendly demeanor
  • willingness to help
  • weed control
  • pest management
  • organic solutions
  • rejuvenation
  • transformation
  • valued customer
  • recommendation
  • product selection
  • landscape improvement
  • gardening tips
  • satisfaction
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