Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?
These days competition between experienced applicants and graduated ones for a particular
job
is arising. In this
essay we are going to assess and enumerate problems and difficulties emerged
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that emerged
in
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on
this
occasion then
find a remedy to solve them.
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and then
One
of the problems of recruiting is choosing among many applicants of different ages with Correct your spelling
diverse
divers
experiences. On the Correct your spelling
diverse
one
hand, older ones are more rational than youngers and they are adopted with
circumstances sooner as they know Change preposition
to
how
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what
atmosphere
of working is like and how they should interact with their new colleagues. Add an article
the atmosphere
an atmosphere
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employees
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we should spend days or a month to learn them how to ask a simple thing from a co-worker properly or Add a comma
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send
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sending
on the other hand
, youngers are so motivated and unlike older people
a slight opportunity inspires them to work hard and show their accomplishments to be promoted if possible.
It is necessary for employers to find a solution for making a balance between their staff in terms of age and experience. It Add a comma
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not
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is not
one
side. Considering the type of job
and duties of the target person can be helpful whether it is allowed to spend time to train someone irrational or making human mistakes which are unavoidable are not allowed and are accompanied with sad consequences so older or reasonable one
is preferred to decrease them. For
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a company needs energetic personnel Add a comma
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beside
experienced ones to lead them. Change preposition
besides
Although
for the same job
and location the kind of job
which is associated with
can be helpful to pick up Change preposition
apply
one
person among applicants , they must regard young employees can be human assets for long-term purposes and older people should be updated and motivated enough to carry out their duties impeccably.Submitted by farid.detective on
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