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The government should pay for the college fees for everyone who wants to study at the University. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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It has been a topic of discussion for a long, that whether the government should pay college fees for the students willing to pursue a University education. In my opinion,
this
 practice shall not be followed as it might create more problems than benefits.
First
 of all, it is important to attend school for basic knowledge and opting for graduation or post-graduation is not necessary for all youngsters.
Moreover
, the bright pupil who excels in his or her academics is generally provided with a scholarship or stipend. If everybody is allowed to attend college for free
then
 there are chances that the value of education might fall drastically.
Also
,
this
 may raise disparity among some students.
For example
, a bright student who wants to focus on the class lecture will often be disturbed by a dull backbencher who is not interested in studying which will lead to disputes.
Therefore
, the government should consider utilizing funds for other activities rather than paying fees for everyone. The authorities shall use the money on developing facilities that are beneficial for the institute as well as its students.
Instead
 of spending blindly on someone who is not even sure about their future goals, it would be advisable to spend on the existing infrastructure.
For instance
, building a high tech laboratory or procuring ultra-modern equipment will contribute to the institution greatly.
Consequently
, undergraduates will admire these upgrades and study more enthusiastically. Because of
this
, the level of education will rise and ultimately the reputation of the University. In conclusion, government officials should not pay the college fees for anyone who wants to study at the university rather they should consider using money where its value is worth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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