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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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To conclude, there are very few
situations
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 where it would be advisable to simply accept an unhappy
situation
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 because hard work over a long period will pay off to some degree in the vast majority of cases. By having a more positive attitude it is
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 more likely that your efforts to make a better
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 will be rewarded, while a more defeatist attitude is likely to reduce your chances to make changes in
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.
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, few would dispute the fact that in even the most difficult
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people
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 can make their
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 better through continued effort. Instances of
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 who worked hard and became successful abound in both developed and developing nations. Some relevant examples of
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 are the postwar
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 of countries like Germany, Japan, and South Korea. All those countries were devastated by
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 to greater and lesser degrees yet they are all currently economic powerhouses. In Japan, World
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 2 left their population depleted of workers,
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deep national debt due to reparations and infrastructure reduced to rubble. By not accepting their
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 they were able to become leaders in technology through notable companies like Sony, Nokia and Toyota. The efficacy of the individuals who had to work hard to improve their
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 is reflected in the overall progress of the country and should serve as an example to all
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-torn nations. On the one hand, the vast majority of
people
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 are unable to drastically change their
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 and acceptance of
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 fact will make them feel more satisfied with their
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. The best example of
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 would be those
people
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 living in dire economic conditions. Recent research puts the Democratic Republic of Congo as one of the poorest nations on Earth, both due to a lack of developed infrastructure and internal strife in recent years. For a person living in a small village, ravaged by
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 or famine, it would be cruel to suggest that they should find a way to improve their
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 when it might simply be impossible.
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people
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 may feel they are better off accepting that they cannot make any changes to their
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 at the present moment and just focus on their own survival and that of their family. These
situations
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 are rare but do exist around the world in various countries, particularly if they are at
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 or experiencing a severe economic downturn. Many
people
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 find themselves in
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 where they must either accept what
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 has given them or find a way to move up in the world. In my opinion,
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 accepting your
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 in
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 may be pragmatic in some cases, it is still better to at least strive to improve your
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 as it can usually be bettered to some degree.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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