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Prisons are an expensive way of making bad people worse’ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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If someone does bad, they should receive
punishment
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 in any way.
Jails
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 are institutions made by the government to punish criminals, though they have turned out to be bad places, they are still good for
punishment
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. In
jails
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 there are lots of
programmes
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 and activities that can help prisoners to reform,
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 there are therapy
programmes
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 that can help with psychological issues which make people turn away from crime.
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, places of
punishment
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 should not be luxurious to the extent that people will enjoy being in
jails
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 than being outside.
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 I would say because of
programmes
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 which are run in places of
punishment
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,
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; education
programmes
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, therapy, healing and many activities which help prisoners with their mental health, lots of money is invested into the institution making prison expensive to maintain, even if it's for the good cause. Those
programmes
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 are essential
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 because they help some of them when they get released,
instead
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 of returning to the life of crime, they may reform,
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 not all will live clean lives, but
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 the goal.
Jails
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 in Europe are not the same as the ones in Africa. Most
jails
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 in Africa are not luxurious, while most in Europe have the pleasure of living like they are in some motel. Making many people in Europe not really feel the pain of jail life. African
jails
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 are very painful, full of hunger, hard labour, and unhealthy living conditions, making them less expensive to maintain. In conclusion, The comparison differs with countries.

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