In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

Fast
food
is all around the country. It is popular because the
food
can be prepared relatively fast. In
this
essay, we’ll talk about how
fastfood
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fast food
impacts
on
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our lifestyle and health.
Therefore
, I completely agree with
aforementioned
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statement. Fast
food
is popular because it can be prepared relatively fast compared to traditional
food
. In some
country
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countries
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such
as the USA, people love to eat it because it’s delicious and cheaper than home cook. The price of fast
food
can be as low as USD 1.09 USD whereas the cost of a
slice
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beef
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is 8 USD.
This
does not even include the price of other raw
material
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materials
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and electrical
cost
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used to cook the
food
. Even though fast
food
is cheap and fast, it comes with a consequence - a nutrition problem.
These
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is
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because it is mostly prepared by frying with lots of oil. When
take
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a look at the triangle of nutrition, It is obvious that fat content should be consumed at the least amount compared to other nutrition.
This
cause
the
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health problem
to
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the one who
consume
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it regularly. Diabetes is one of the chronic
disease
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that occurs due to
these
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food
. Another problem is heart disease.
This
happens because the cholesterol from
these
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junk
food
builds up in your artery. As
the
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time pass, it blocks the blood entering
in
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the heart before you know it. Government should take a course of action by taxing
these
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junk
food
and
subsidize
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the
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healthy
food
.
This
will encourage people to buy more healthy
food
and become
a
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healthier
person
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people
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. In conclusion, Comfort
food
is bad for your body and you should take more healthy
food
. You are what you eat so, let’s eat
healthy
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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