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It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages of change outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays,
change
 happens everywhere, every time. It is ubiquitous. While some
people
 argue that
change
 produces positive outcomes, others believe that it only causes negative results. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why the beneficial aspects of
change
 take precedence over the detrimental aspects of it.
To begin
 with,
people
 can benefit from a
change
.
First
 of all,
people
 may feel a sense of satisfaction when they are
finally
 able to modify their bad habits.
For instance
, my husband tried to stop smoking for years and when he
finally
 went on a cold turkey, he was extremely proud of himself and happy.
Second
 of all,
change
 brings improvements. If
people
 had been complacent and had not wanted to make any changes, it would not have been possible to invent the current latest technologies
such
 as mobile phones or the internet.
On the other hand
,
people
 can suffer when they try to make changes.
Firstly
,
people
 may be depressed because of the enormous stress they are under. Unless they manage their stress well, they will be diagnosed with depression.
Secondly
,
people
's efforts, time, and money are sometimes wasted.
For example
,
although
people
 put a lot of time and money to make modifications, if the
change
 does not make any desired results,
then
 all the efforts made by
people
 are deemed nothing. To sum up, even though
change
 entails both beneficial and malign implications for
people
, the former plays more significant roles than the latter.
Therefore
, I believe that the advantages of
change
 outweigh its disadvantages.
Submitted by narsysos on

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