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Around the world, traffic accidents cause many serious injuries every day. Due to this, some people believe stricter laws are necessary to improve the road safety. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that due to
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 number of traffic
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, stringent
rules
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 and
regulations
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 should be enforced to upgrade
road
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 safety.
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 essay agrees with the statement because strict laws will lead to a decline in the mortality
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 and it will make citizens responsible. The main reason why I believe that tough
rules
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 are mandatory
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it
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 will decrease the
rate
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 of deaths due to
road
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accident
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accidents
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. Many
people
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 drive under the influence of drugs and alcohol and it leads to their loss of motor and sensory control while driving.
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, it leads to most
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vehicle
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accidents
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. If
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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 will strict
regualtions
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regulations
 against the drink and
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driving
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, it will deter
people
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 and it will lead to
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 in
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rate
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 of mortality.
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, in India,
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 government has implemented many stringent
rules
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 and
regulations
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 against the traffic
voilators
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violators
violations
, due to which the number of deaths has decreased significantly over the
last
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one
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decade.
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, adopting strict
rules
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 plays a crucial role in minimizing
road
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accidents
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 and boosting safety. Another reason to consider is that it will make
people
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 more responsible. When the government will exercise strict punishments
people
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 act
responsible
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responsibly
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 due to fear of getting penalised. These punishments can range from license getting revoked,
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 fines and
prisonment
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imprisonment
.
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,
people
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 will abide
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rules
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by rules
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 and
regulations
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, which will alleviate the
probem
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problem
 of
road
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accidents
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.
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, South Korea imposed recently hefty fines and
prisonment
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imprisonment
 for those who
overspeed
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overspend
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 while driving
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which
it
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has improved
the
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road
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 safety.
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, following the
rules
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 and
regulations
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 will make the
people
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 responsible citizens which will lessen
the
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road
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accidents
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. In conclusion, I concur with the statement that stringent laws are crucial to enhance
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road
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 protection because
it
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 will help to curb the
rate
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 of deaths and it will make
people
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 careful while driving.
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