Topic: some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?
It is believed that
money
plays a crucial part in making people
cheerful but I would not support it. In my view, other factors can make life joyful. This
essay will discuss above
question and introduce the other reasons for being euphoric.
On the one hand, in the materialistic world Correct article usage
the above
money
talks and necessities
of life Correct article usage
the necessities
such
as clothing, housing, food, education and so on are fulfilled by money
. Furthermore
, it brings power, respect and reputation. For instance
, an
affluent Correct article usage
apply
people
can afford
buy a luxurious house, Add the particle
toafford
travelling
worldwide, Wrong verb form
travel
set
off a thriving business Correct word choice
and set
thus
he
experiences a sense of well-being and considerably benefit from social welfare. Correct pronoun usage
apply
In addition
, in their opinion, the levels of happiness and Fix the agreement mistake
satisfaction
satisfactions
are always associated with wealth. Actually, Correct your spelling
satisfaction
people
are evaluated by their possessions and assets.
On the other hand
, other criteria for assessing the delight of people
should be considered such
as having close
Add an article
a close
friend
and sympathy family, having Fix the agreement mistake
friends
an
excellent health, a rewarding job, security in life, peace of mind. from my Remove the article
apply
Correct your spelling
standpoint
stand point
, A vivid example of Correct your spelling
standpoint
this
issue is that owner of a magnificent villa or someone who is always have an eye on the last
trend of clothes and state of the art car is more likely to facing
a degree of loneliness and isolation due to having no families or relatives to share the feeling or memorable moments with them. Change the form of the verb
face
Moreover
, it is possible that a loaded person who lives alone and is suffering from an incurable illness or in a predicament, not only he
Add a missing verb
does he
has
no one to help and sympathize with him but Wrong verb form
have
also
his money
is useless and cannot do something for him.
In conclusion, in my eyes, despite wealth give
you Wrong verb form
giving
feeling
of security and worth and human being nature have Correct article usage
a feeling
tendency
to spend stacks of Add an article
a tendency
the tendency
money
for a
fleeting pleasure, but form Correct article usage
apply
a
strong relationship with families and friends, having good health and peace of Correct article usage
apply
mine
are more worthwhile.Correct your spelling
mind
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