Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of infornation should be restricted on the media. To what extend do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

In
this
ever-changing world, due to the development of technology,
information
can reach people worldwide much more easily, which may even include the detailed description of
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the criminal
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criminal
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criminals
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. There are some ideas that
those
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information
should be restricted
on
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newspaper
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newspapers
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and television as
they
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will cause a myriad of consequences.
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, I
am wholeheartedly oppose
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this
opinion.
To begin
with, it exists copious opinions
of
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restricting focused criminal description
on
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media due to its negative effects.
This
is understandable as when posting those kinds of
information
, there will be an imitation.
For instance
, young people may learn the new way of cheating and frauding citizens in order to steal their money through knowledge provided by media platforms. These actions are believed to lead to more
number of
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crimes
such
as stealing or
murdering
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, for that reason, they should be restricted or even banned on news.
Nevertheless
, providing advanced knowledge about how criminals work to some extent is not utterly negative and should not be limited. When residents acknowledge
of
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that issue by reading the
information
about them on
social
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platform
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platforms
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, individuals are more likely to avoid
from
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being deceived or even
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what will happen.
For example
, there are more and more new methods of transferring drugs worldwide
such
as hiding in toys or in
body
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by swallowing in. When
citizens
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aware of how criminals do that, it is easier for them to find out and report to the police. Not to mention the fact that even when those crimes are imitated, it takes less time and effort for
government
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to discover and prevent them. All things considered, I am inclined to believe
that specific descriptions
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of
criminal
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criminals
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are
no
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need to be strictly controlled despite
of
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some
insubstiantial
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insubstantial
substantial
effects it may
brings
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back. It is tough to imagine how people can deal
with
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when
less
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types of
information
are provided.
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