Museums and art galleries should show local history and culture instead of work from different countries. Discuss both views and give opinion

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from all around the world.

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their people to the knowledge of

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traditions, cultures as well as

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Museums and art galleries should show local history and culture instead of work from different countries. Discuss both views and give opinion

Should hunting be considered a sport? Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In some societies the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. What are the reasons for this trend? And what possible solutions could reduce this issue?

In many countries government are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money.

Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.