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Museums and art galleries should show local history and culture instead of work from different countries. Discuss both views and give opinion

#museums #art #galleries #show #history #culture #work #countries
Most of all person likes to
visi
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visit
galary
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.Nowadays, most
the
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nations
 prefer to keep the
art
 of their own country.It is considered that in museums every country should put
an
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only their own
imformation
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information
.
However
, the leading
nations
 try to explore
art
 and craft from all around the world.I
completly
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completely
 agree with
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this
 notion,my statement would be elaborated
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 the
next
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To begin
 with,
this
 idea will
gain
 economic growth.To explain it, India is known as a
diffrent
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different
 cultural country,it has various languages,
art
, tradition,different religious people.If other
nations
 will put these things in their museums
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after
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 some foreigners will come to watch it,after that
this
 trend
gain
 more and more value
of
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in
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 India.
For example
,France has a very famous painting of
moalisa
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Monalisa
,thousands of
tourist
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tourists
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 come to watch it.
Hence
 it will
gain
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the nations
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nations
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nation's
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 economy.
Secondly
,
also
,it is beneficial for those people who want to visit a whole world for an
art
 and history,
culture
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the culture
a culture
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 of them but they cannot afford it,regarding their own land's
art
galary
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gallery
 they can do it.
For instance
,
mahatma
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the mahatma
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gandhi
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Gandhi
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 museum has
a
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multiple
costoms
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customs
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and art
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art
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arts
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 from all around the world.
Moreover
,
child
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the child
a child
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 is
a
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the
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 backbone of
nation
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the nation
a nation
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, they can grow up with these types of all
imformation
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information
 by a small picnic
of
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at
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this
 centre and will
gain
lot
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a lot
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 of information
of
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about
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 various
nations
. To sum up, all countries should encourage
to
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their people to the knowledge of
a
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various
countries
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countries'
country's
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 traditions, cultures as well as
art
.
Otherwise
, they will have limited knowledge regarding the earth.
As a
result
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,result
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 it would be
benefical
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beneficial
 for all countries.
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