Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Although
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,it is often argued by some individuals that good
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extremely good with persuading
people
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to buy with the help of advertisement while some
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people
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have the opinion that we should not pay attention to it because it is very rampant.
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essay will discuss both sides of view in the following paragraphs but in my
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I believe that it is essential to advertise because of several reasons. On the one hand,there are numerous rationales why publicity is very crucial in our everyday life.
Firstly
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,it promotes
business
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and attracts consumers.With adequate and good publicity individuals tends to know more about the company and
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allowing
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customers to patronize them.
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,it builds up the fame of the organization.As far as,there is good pro traying of
business
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,the company will be well known by lots of
people
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.
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,it creates trust
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the
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society because when a firm portrays
their
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work which attracted
much
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consumers,
people
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tends
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to put all their trust
to
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the product.
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,the richest man in the whole world was interviewed and was asked
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secret of his
business
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.He said that if not because of showcasing his
business
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,he would not have made it
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far.
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,showcasing
goods
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are
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very important.
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,not everybody can advertise their
products
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because of several reasons.
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,it reduces
cost effectiveness
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and for that reason publicizing
products
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requires
alot
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a lot
of money as well as it is not for poor
people
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.
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,it encourages
sale
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the sale
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of inferior
products
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.An individual
that
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sales
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poor
goods
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does
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not need to be
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shown
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showcasing
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it. So it gives rooms for below standard
people
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.
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, researchers have reviewed that the cost of advertising
goods
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was the major reason why poor
people
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cannot participate in publicity.
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,if the government and affluent personal can come together and help the needy ones in the establishment of their
products
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,it will be good. In conclusion,I firmly believed that portraying
goods
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is very essential because it builds up
business
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and draws consumers closely and it equally
build
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up fame.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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