Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Although
,it is often argued by some individuals that good are
extremely good with persuading Change the verb form
is
people
to buy with the help of advertisement while some person's
have the opinion that we should not pay attention to it because it is very rampant.Change the noun form
people
person
This
essay will discuss both sides of view in the following paragraphs but in my opinion
I believe that it is essential to advertise because of several reasons.
On the one hand,there are numerous rationales why publicity is very crucial in our everyday life.Add a comma
,opinion
Firstly
,it promotes business
and attracts consumers.With adequate and good publicity individuals tends to know more about the company and therefore
allowing
customers to patronize them.Wrong verb form
allow
Secondly
,it builds up the fame of the organization.As far as,there is good pro traying of business
,the company will be well known by lots of people
.Thirdly
,it creates trust to
Change preposition
in
the
society because when a firm portrays Correct article usage
apply
their
work which attracted Correct pronoun usage
its
much
consumers, Change the quantifier
many
people
tends
to put all their trust Change the verb form
tend
to
the product.Change preposition
in
For instance
,the richest man in the whole world was interviewed and was asked the
secret of his Change preposition
about the
business
.He said that if not because of showcasing his business
,he would not have made it this
far. Therefore
,showcasing goods
are
very important.
Change the verb form
is
Conversely
,not everybody can advertise their products
because of several reasons. Firstly
,it reduces cost effectiveness
and for that reason publicizing Add a hyphen
cost-effectiveness
products
requires alot
of money as well as it is not for poor Correct your spelling
a lot
people
. Secondly
,it encourages sale
of inferior Add an article
the sale
products
.An individual that
Correct word choice
who
sales
poor Replace the word
sells
goods
does
not need to be Change the verb form
do
Wrong verb form
shown
show casing
it. So it gives rooms for below standard Correct your spelling
showcasing
people
.For example
, researchers have reviewed that the cost of advertising goods
was the major reason why poor people
cannot participate in publicity. Therefore
,if the government and affluent personal can come together and help the needy ones in the establishment of their products
,it will be good.
In conclusion,I firmly believed that portraying goods
is very essential because it builds up business
and draws consumers closely and it equally build
up fame.Change the verb form
builds
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