Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement. Give the reason and relevant examples.

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Hazardous
sports
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have many
detrimantel
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detrimental
effects on
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both individuals and society,
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some people believe
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should be banned. In my opinion,
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sport's drawbacks are
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outweigh
its merits and must be banned, especially for some age groups. To
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begin
with, it is important to consider the
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philosophy
behind developing different
sports
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. One of the most important
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,
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is improving body
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. As it is obvious, these
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not only are not beneficial for the
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health
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but threaten human
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. In
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wrestling
,
for example
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,
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research
researches
show that
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death age of players is considerably lower (compared to other
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athlete
athletes
typical death age) due to
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furious
copmetitions
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competitions
competition
. Another positive role of different
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are
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empowering
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teamwork
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team work
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skills and spiritual
health
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, which does not seem possible in
this
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regard.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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