Discuss your opinion on how modernism can affect our health. What can the government do to overcome such situations?

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Human

health

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plays a vital role to live a happy and long life. In the 21st ,century

health

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is affected by modernization.So, the

government

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should take precautions to overcome the effect on human

health

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. I will discuss the problems and solutions, as well as, the opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.

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with, Nowadays air pollution is the biggest issue on the earth. The air pollution increased by the vehicles

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, transportation system. For example, we know about, many vehicles run with the help of an internal combustion engine.

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during the running time vehicle produce harmful gases like Carbon dioxide, Nitrogen oxide and Sulphur dioxide. So that kinds of gases

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our breathing system. Apart from

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, with modern technology everyone

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want

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eat fast

food

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like pizza, burger, sandwich and so on.

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that types of

food

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have more and more

carbohydrate

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. Which is help to

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the metabolism in our body. If the ratio of metabolism increases,

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the weight of the body will

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so,

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that kind of unhealthy

food

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is harmful to our body.

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the level of air pollution, our

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is starting to sell

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electric vehicle in the market on the behalf of petrol and diesel vehicle.

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, these electronic cars are working on the induction motor and

this

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motor does not produce any type of gases.

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, electric vehicles

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are beneficial

and simultaneously

increase

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the economy of the country.

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, no one can stop eating fast

food

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. so, the

government

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should spread Awareness of , how junk

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is harmful to our human

health

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otherwise

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increase

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the

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junk

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. As a ,result only, a few people who eat fast

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who has more money. To conclude, in the modern era people live to

hard

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the hard

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and fast life. They do not care about their life. According to my opinion, If the

government

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take the decision, so no one can stop him.

shrikunjrana0612Thu Apr 07 2022

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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