Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

many people argue that contemporary society makes people

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busier than in the past leading to

they

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don`t

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have

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much time for their kids ,

whereas

others suppose children get less attention

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their

parents

.

Therefore

, I believe that

parents

still spend as much as

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occasion on their kids.

To begin

with, I agree with the first part of

this

statement that with the faster pace of the world , the workforce is changing

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people should adapt to a whole new workflow .

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, gender equality has gotten stronger which means women increasingly play a crucial role in the community.

Moreover

, because of the pressure of life

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both

parents

have to work out to pay for expensive living costs and the basic

demand

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of life

such

as electricity, water bills, house rental , children`s school fees and entertainment.

As a result

, adults spend as much as possible their time on work at least eight hours .

However

,

parents

seem to seek the right balance between profession and family.

while

parents

take responsibility for their work , they will

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their kids to school and

then

when they go home they spend

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quality time with their families

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especially on weekends and holidays.

For instance

,

according to

tourist companies during ten years , the number of family

travel

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is

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increasing every year. Another thing, nowadays there are so many activities to bond family-related between father, mother and children like helping on their home works, extracurricular courses for family. In conclusion, finding a life balance is an important thing for any individual, it is necessary to take care of children to develop themselves

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and

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