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nowadays, a lot of buildings, such as offices and schools, are now being built with an open play design. why is that? do you see this as a positive or negative development?

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buildings
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 has always been in the interests of people. Nowadays, many properties are built with an open plan
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 as offices and educational
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. In
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 essay, I will reflect upon the root of
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 and argue whether it is beneficial or not. The main reason which could be the cause of
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 behaviour of claustrophobia. Studies demonstrate that the fear of tiny places has risen by 15% in the past 5 years.
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 are designed in cubicles have much fewer visitors as opposed to the ones in which everyone shares their study area. For
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 reason, owners of public
buildings
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 have realised
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 issue and prefer to have an open plan
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, which could be the reason for
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. As for its effects, if the trend of the mentioned trait keeps increasing,
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 it would be beneficial to have
buildings
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 outlined in that manner.
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, being claustrophobic might reduce and everyone will be delighted.
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 mind is designed in a way in which, under stress and dire situations, its performance is significantly reduced.
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 housing for people who are dealing with an enormous amount of stress.
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, having an open
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 is
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. To sum up,
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 in the architecture of the constructions is owing to people's behaviour and needs.
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