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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are conflicting views about what should be the primary environmental challenge in our era. Some people argue that the major issue is about the declining biodiversity while others feel that there are more principal challenges than the loss of certain species.
Although
 there are some justifications for the former point, I would agree with the latter one. I will address both sides with
this
 essay and give my own opinion.
Initially
, it can be argued that preventing the absence of more and more animals is vital. As we all know, each specie plays an irreplaceable role in the biological chain. The lack of one kind can lead to overspill/ripple effects on other concerning animals, including plants, the entire ecosystem and
finally
 back to humans themselves.
For example
, the massive death of minor creatures even coral reefs means the possibility of worsening seawater conditions and less necessary sea products for local people.
Consequently
, it can be disastrous if we ignore the protection of various species.
However
, compared to cases like
this
, there are certainly more pressing challenges before us.
For example
, the Arctic amplification phenomenon, which means the original ice that reflects heat is now replaced by the dark sea that restores abundant heat and brings us looming issues like the rise of sea level that forces thousands of people to move away. It does not mean less seafood or bad water condition is not crucial but there are both more impactful and urgent predicaments that can take people’s lives right away. In conclusion,
this
 essay boils down to one essential point, which is only through overall efforts in every aspect can the environmental situation become better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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