In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs? What are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future?

It is lucid that in a large number of
communities
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the
papel
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that a
mother
develops is not the same
than
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the
fathers
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. With multiple differences
due to
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cultural heritage or just organic differences between men and women, parents assume their role in their small society called family.
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a forecast of the mentioned discrepancy. The first cause is related to the biology and the natural differences between mothers and fathers, during
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pregnancy
for example
, the
mother
is literally connected with her babies
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the very first moment, feeding them, protecting them and offering a world in her own body. The
father
on the other hand
,
although
is
also
important during the process cannot do more
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a company and it marks a difference for the rest of
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life. The second reason, related to external factors is the culture because for decades men have been considered stronger than
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women and have
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their responsibility as providers
whereas
the women represent the patient and carer role and most recent generations are possibly just assuming those learned roles.
However
, the increasing number of people with
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perspective
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of gender reducing the traditional stereotype of “the
father
is the discipline and the
mother
the love”
as well as
the breakthroughs revolutionizing biological development and procreation make us
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that the difference between these two important characters will disappear very soon.
For instance
, new methods
such
as “Kangaroo care”
are involving
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parents during the very first care improving emotional connections between the baby and the
father
that evidently will mark the future of both.
To conclude
, the
mother
and
father
roles are different because perform
according to
the model of past generations and the biological responsibility.
Nevertheless
, new medical alternatives and
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view
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promise to reduce the difference encouraging
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fathers to adopt the carer papel and have stronger relationships with their children.
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