You have borrowed something from you friend, and it got damaged. Write a letter to a friend 1. Apologize for damaging the product 2. Explain what happened 3. Say how are you going to fix the issue.

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Dear Zoe, I am very sorry about the canon

camera

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that I borrowed from you had been spoiled because of me. Sorry, it is taken me so long to

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you why I hadn’t returned to you. To be honest, I’ve been feeling so guilty that I delayed writing to you and I damaged it accidentally. I know how it is important for you and it is the only gift that you received from your mother before she passed away.

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, your family photos especially you were on vacation when your mother was alive were saved in

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camera

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. What happen is that

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I went to the Golden Temple which is one of the famous temples that had been established by gold with my family and it is beautiful. I took the

camera

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to capture beautiful memories when we were in

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temple. There was no problem when I used it on the

first

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day of the trip,

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, I got inadvertently hit form a boy even

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lost my control and fell down on a floor along with the

camera

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on the

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day of the trip. Because of a misfortune event, the

camera

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’s body got damaged. I have spoken to the authorized dealers of the canon’s service centre to repair it nicely as soon as I get back to my hometown. Fortunately, they informed me that the replacement of the body is working without affecting the functionality. Now it should be as good as new and I will send it on to you

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week. Again, I deeply apologise for damaging it and taking

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time to return it to you. I hope you can forgive me. Warm Regards Sandar Myint

Submitted by sandarmyint740 on Sat Apr 09 2022

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

283 words

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