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An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think that this has brought people closer together while other things people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Nowadays with technology ,progress it becomes various ways more than pervious .There are two views , some
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 believe that increasing
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 on the using the
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 to meet a new
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 and socialise ,and others believe that
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 close but while other things
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 are more isolated . I am going to discuss these views and give my opinion. The
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 , some companies lead to attendance more employment of pervious .
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 , all individuals it became busier , the sites and programs are more useful. Even the children it is extremely lonely and does not like to play with friends .Because of some devices and ,
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