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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies factories to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree

#traffic #companies #factories #countryside
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It is argued that the issue of
traffic
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 congestion and housing could be tackled if the large farm and
factories
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 would be shifted to villages.
Although
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 the migration of companies to villages would solve the problem of deforestation in
cities
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 and
also
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 improves the quality of air in urban
areas
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 still believe that it leads to unemployment in
cities
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. On the one hand, moving big forms and
factories
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 to the countryside would be reduced the job opportunities for the
people
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 who live in suburbs and
cities
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. It not only affects the living standard of the citizens but
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 impacts their needs and desires because the humans in urban
areas
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 are highly dependent on their
work
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 in
factories
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 and companies. As a consequence, masses of suburbs field and get unemployed.
on the other hand
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 quality of air would be improved if villagers do not visit
cities
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 in search of
work
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. Nowadays most of the youngsters' regular commute to
cities
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 for
work
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 which leads to high
traffic
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 in
cities
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 and the congestion of harmful gases from vehicles contaminate the environment.
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, most
people
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 shifted to
cities
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 which causes a huge amount of cutting of trees for more houses and apartments and due to a plethora of individuals in
cities
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 the charges of houses
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 increased. So, if firms would be shifted to rural
areas
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, the
people
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 do not have any need to stay in
cities
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 ,which would
also
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 reduce the prices of houses.
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, a survey was conducted in Malaysia, which show that, in 2010, the government move a few
factories
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 to the countryside by which 65% of
traffic
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 problems is solved.
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, it is vividly clear that
people
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 would not face much pollution and surviving issues if firms migrate in villages. In conclusion, it is undeniable fact that the migration of big association and
factories
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 in rural
areas
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 improve the
traffic
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, air pollution and would
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 protect the trees crowd of
cities
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 find less
work
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 in urban
areas
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.
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