It is suggested that young people should undertake a period of unpaid work to help people in the community. Does it bring more benefits of drawbacks to the community and young people?

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Humanity is the base of modern
society
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and in order to live in a
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, every child should be taught from their childhood to be kind and humane.
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, a group of
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advised that the younger generation should encourage to do some social services voluntarily.
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,
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would bring more advantages as compared to the disadvantages to the young
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and
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. The
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merit of doing social work for the young
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without giving
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to them would teach them not everything in life is done for
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, sometimes helping the needy
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is far above the
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.
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, in our college, there was a club called 'NSS' in which club members used to do social works at the weekends like donating something to the orphanage, cleaning public streets and encouraging
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to keep their surroundings clean and green etc.By interacting with the needy
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,the young
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will be able to feel their pain of them and will help them without hoping for some reward in return.In
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way , we will prepare our younger generation to become responsible and kind citizens.
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, there are a few drawbacks linked with doing unpaid social services for the young
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.Because
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is the phase of life in which children are encouraged to do something good and in return, they hope for some rewards.With
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hope, they happily and wholeheartedly do something in order to get good results.
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, doing something without any reward would discourage them and they will not do that again in their life. The reward would not always be
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, it would
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be something different that will bring happiness to young
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and they feel appreciated. To sum up, definitely, helping
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by teenagers have more benefits for both
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and children.But, in my opinion, children should be given some rewards other than
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just to tell them they had done a good job and
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to encourage them to keep doing
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in the future.
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