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To succeed in a business, one needs to know maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#business #maths
There are those
believe
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who believe
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 that in order to achieve a prolific company, the
owner
 and staff must finish the academic mathematic subject.
Therefore
, it will
less
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be less
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 hassle and not difficult to handle the
business
 by the worker. I
am strongly agree
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to
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with
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this
 view.
To begin
 with, many
individual
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individuals
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 insist that
mathematic
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mathematics
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 is
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one
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on
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one
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 of the
upmost
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utmost
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 key in building a productive company,
thus
owner
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owners
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should require a
bsaic
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basic
 math.
For instance
, a businessman is accountable to the company and he must know how to trace their finances and learn how
to
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apply
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calculate the profit of the marketing department and compare
to
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it to
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 the loss of the
business
.
Moreover
, by knowing to compute, the
owner
 may get some idea to segregate wisely for the staff's salary.
In addition
, learning
mathematic
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mathematics
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 is important in our
dailing
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daily
 living and not only in the
business
. Because in every day of our life people always use a number, like buying some breakfast, we count our money, and paying our bills math is always there.
For example
, learning how to budget your household expenses may help you to a better lifestyle provided that you already jot down your budget for the month and you can only spend money
to
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on
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 those
alloted
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allowed
allotted
 in your list.
Also
, you may avoid buying unnecessary things as you can only spend the amount you have. So in my
knowledge
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,knowledge
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 I do believe that
this
 subject
is
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really
matter
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matters
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 to us. I conclude that
this
 subject has
the
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an
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 important role in our life not only in the
business
 but in general.
However
,
success
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successful
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business
 is made up of a dedicated and knowledgeable
owner
.
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