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In order to solve traffic problems,goverments should tax private car owner heavily and use the money to improve public transportation .what are advantages and disadvantages of such a solution.

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Nowadays, traffic congestion is becoming worse and worse, a potential solution is for the government to increase tax on owner vehicles sharply and
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 allocate collecting money to the development of public transportation systems.
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, there are both pros and cons to
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 program. In
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 solution, a high tax could be helpful and lead people to not drive their own cars,
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commuting by public transportation
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 as Bus, Metro system and so on. There is an undeniable fact, if the usage of private car owners drops, traffic issues will be reduced. Turning to the other side of the argument, there are
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 significant disadvantages to solving
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 concern. one of the most important ones is that higher taxes are no longer effective in the modern world. some people have not prefered to commute by other vehicles anymore,
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, with the development of the transportation system, even increasing lines, some of them should walk on foot a long distance to reach specific stations rather than driving their cars
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 parking.
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 but
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 causes inclining
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 issue. All things considered,
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 action has both positive and negative aspects, we need to weigh up the benefits and drawbacks. From my perspective
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 potential program is totally related to society's behaviour,
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 before presenting any solution we should consider their people's feedback.
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