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Some people believe that the main reasons of learning a foreign language are travel and work , others said that there are many different reasons . Discuss both views and gives your opinion

#people #language #travel #work
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Nowadays, some individuals say that learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is reasonable only to
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 travelling or work abroad.
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, some people argue that learning
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a foreign
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language
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 is not only
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 in
workplace
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the workplace
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 or
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in foreign
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 countries, but
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it
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apply
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helps differently in our lives. In
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 essay, I will examine two sides of
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 statement.
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, most
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people
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the people
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are
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also
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 want to be fluent in a
second
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language
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besides
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their mother
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 tongue which can help
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an entity
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 to communicate and
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 benefits them with bigger options of jobs in
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another country
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, so
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the preference
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of
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for
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 foreign dialect is for working and travelling
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purposes
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.
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, many students are moving to other destination to pursue their future through many countries like England, USA ..etc
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 make compulsory need to study English well,
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, to join a university where must have learnt
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 dialect.
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, working or touring is the only motive to study.
Secondly
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, some people think that a different accent is learnt as their hobbies on it. Additional, many find it captivating to know a certain wording.
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, my
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college
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collage
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college
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 is always interested in
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language
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languages
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 in over the world. Once he can arrange
time
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a time
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 for learning, he will sign in a
language
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 course immediately. For him, knowing multiple
speaking
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 is an achievement. He tried so hard to learn one
language
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 after another. That
make
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makes
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 him more convinced
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in communication
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 and broaden
him
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 horizons. In conclusion, I personally believe that learning a foreign
language
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 has more useful than just being used for travelling or working abroad. It could make you
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be a communicate and confident person.
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