Some of the method used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today's society. To what extend do you agree with this view?

There is no doubt,
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that advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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spread
great
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influence on everyone’s life . Nowadays some methods
are
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that are
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irrelevant and not acceptable
which
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apply
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are used in advertising for modern
society
. I agree with
this
notion and
i
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will articulate some agreement points in
forthcoming
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paragraphs. To commence with , there
are
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number
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of points why
advertisement
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advertisements
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are
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is
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unethical and unacceptable in today’s
society
.
Firstly
, wastage of
large
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amount of money. To explain it , some popular brands spend excessive money
for
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on
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the
advertisement
of their brand with the help of
celebrities
and they give
large
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amount
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amounts
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of money to the
celebrities
. To
epitone
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epitome
, Salman khan took excessive amount
form
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from
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thumbs
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a thumbs
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up
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brand just for doing
advertisement
. Meanwhile,
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the advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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also
spread
wrong
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a wrong
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influence on adult’s life . Because some
advertisement
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advertisements
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give
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preference to violence
due to
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this
adults
follow them and
adults
start doing dangerous stunts in real life.
Moreover
,
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the advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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also
give
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preference to alcohol and it is put bad impact on
society
due to
this
many
adults
start taking alcohol at
their
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an
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earlier age .
For example
, some popular
celebrities
take part in alcohol
advertisement
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advertisements
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because of
this
many
adults
follow them .
In addition
, during the
advertisement
, many female
celebrities
wear short clothes and
this
kind of
advertisement
nobody can watch with their family members but some popular companies
doing
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do
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this
to attract customers.
Hence
, these are the points
which
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that
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are not acceptable
by
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to
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society
. To conclude, these methods of advertising are really put
negative
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a negative
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impact on today’s
society
so , companies of
advertisement
should change the way of
advertisement
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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