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The population of China grew drastically. Do you agree or disagree?

#population #china
The line graph depicts details regarding the number of
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cases
 in Mashhad. The chart compares data from 1983 to 1992. Overall, there were significant fluctuations in the total case of
diarrhea
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 in Mashhad over the 9-year study period. It is
also
 clear that the country was able to post the highest
cases
 of
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 in 1989 and was eradicated in 1992. In detail,
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diarrhea
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 in Mashhad started
during
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 1983 with around 100
cases
, which was the same figure
in
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 1984. There was a slight increase in the number of
cases
 from 1985 to 1987, starting at roughly 110
cases
 and reaching about 200
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cases
.
However
,
this
 particular disease declined gradually in 1988, sinking to a low of around 100
cases
, which was almost identical to that documented in 1983 and 1984. By 1989, the
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cases
 rapidly rose, reaching a peak of approximately 400
cases
.
By comparison
,
this
 figure was almost four times as much as that recorded
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 the beginning of the study. After a year, the
cases
 gradually decreased by roughly 50
then
 it remained unchanged until 1991 with nearly 350
cases
. By the final year of the survey, the
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