Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
animals
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have been in danger of extinction. Some people argue that we should protect all wild
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others insist little protection should be placed on the
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. In
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essay, I will discuss both opinions and argue humans should place safety
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on wild
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with, protecting wild
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brings about both positive and negative outcomes. First of all, the ecosystem will remain stable.
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, if
whales
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are at risk of being extinct, shrimps and plankton, which are the main food of
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, will increase sharply as fewer
whales
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eat shrimps and plankton.
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, when some methods are put in place to keep the number of
whales
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, the system will stay stable.
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, some harmful
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are
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protected by people's action plans.
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, human beings will suffer from the harmful effects caused by those violent beasts.
On the other hand
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, few
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measures
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for wild
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also
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produce beneficial and detrimental implications.
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, only the fittest can survive, which means unless it is strong enough to win against other
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, it will disappear and go extinct.
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, only the finest will remain in the world. Despite
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positive aspect, no safeguard
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for wild
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will result in the disappearance of some
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.
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, we are now witnessing our precious and harmless koalas are on the brink of disappearing from the earth. Given that safeguard
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were not placed before and the number of koalas has been significantly decreasing,
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is no doubt that so many other
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not cared for by people will face a similar destiny.
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, protecting wild
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produce
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both beneficial and detrimental effects.
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, not putting protection
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causes not only benign but
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malign ramifications. Given that the positive impacts of protection outweigh the negative aspects of not introducing safety
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, I think all wild
animals
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should be protected.
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task response
The essay addresses the task but could provide a more balanced view of the two opinions, and the introduction lacks a clear summary of the main points.
coherence and cohesion
The essay demonstrates some logical structure, but the introduction and conclusion could be developed more effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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