Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?
That is
true that children
and parents
Change noun form
parents'
parent's
bond
are extremely tight since Fix the agreement mistake
bonds
parents
are those who gave the opportunity for their kids
to be born.However
, as children
getting
older their relationship with their Wrong verb form
get
parents
also
become altered. The reason is that as people become mature and able to earn their own money they become independent from those who are their mother
and father. Fix the agreement mistake
mothers
This
essay will discuss which part should parents
play in life
of adult Add an article
the life
children
.
Firstly
, parents
are great teachers because of their long term experience and age. This
is because they have faced diverse circumstances and life
situation
so that they could furtherly support their Fix the agreement mistake
situations
children
with their Correct your spelling
advice
advices
and Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
life
tips. To illustrate , my aunt is always consulting her daughter with Correct your spelling
advice
advices
when it comes Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
which
medicine to purchase for her Change preposition
to which
children
or to which hospital to take her kids
. Moreover
, parents
can take care of their grandchildren when their parents
at
work or going out Add a missing verb
are at
to
somewhere. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, my colleague is always leaving her daughters with her parents
in law so that she can freedomly
Correct your spelling
freedom
to
hang out with us and relax. Fix the infinitive
apply
Thus
, parents
are essential in grown children '
Change noun form
children's
life
as they can support them with life
Correct your spelling
advice
advices
and Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
taking
care of their Wrong verb form
take
child
.
Fix the agreement mistake
children
Seocindly
, Correct your spelling
Secondly
parents
is
so crucial in everyone's Change the verb form
are
life
even if he or she is already mature and old. So having parents
is so vital because of
just having them Change preposition
apply
make
anyone happier and content with their lives. Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
This
is because as Kazakh
proverb says: the kid without Correct article usage
the Kazakh
father
is half Correct article usage
a father
orphan
, Correct article usage
an orphan
without
Correct word choice
and without
mother
is Correct article usage
a mother
completely
Correct article usage
a completely
orphan
. To illustrate , when Correct article usage
an orphan
Add a hyphen
grown-up
grown
up boy or girl is getting married , Add an article
a grown
the grown
parents
role in their weddings Change noun form
parents'
parent's
are
so important because they are reorientation of his family's prosperity and relationship. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
This
would lead to have
good connections with Change the verb form
having
bride's
Correct article usage
the bride's
parents
as they in the future will socialise and meet up in crucial events. So, parents
can play in adults life
as even old
person Correct article usage
an old
need
to have live Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
parents
to feed himself not to parentless.
To conclude, parents 's
roleRemove the s
parents'
Add a missing verb
is
kids
but also
Add a hyphen
grown-up
grown
up Change preposition
in grown
children
because parents
are those who have a life
and raised their sons and daughters. Even the
individual is grown up , Correct word choice
if the
parent's
role is irreplaceable and essential since they can be supportive Correct article usage
the parent's
with
providing Change preposition
by
Correct your spelling
advice
advices
and taking care of their Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
kids
. Moreover
, old people need to have their parents
besides
because of being felt that they are in Change preposition
apply
full
family and not alone .Add an article
the full
a full
This
would further
my
support Change the pronoun
me
them
in future family events.Change preposition
for them
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