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Some feel that cities shold be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#feel #cities #shold #functionality
Designing a
city
 becomes a difficult task when there exists a controversy
whether
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 to give preference to its
beauty
 or
the
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 functionality. I feel both the aspects should be looked upon, but in most cases, the
second
 aspect can be given more preference. When analysing the merits of designing a
city
 beautiful, the best is the impressive life a
city
 resident can get rather than adjusting
with
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 the
usual
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 busy and hectic life. To be precise, an individual would feel refreshed and rejuvenated even after a tiresome work in a
city
 with ample space for gardens, parks and specially designed buildings.
This
 sort of emotional well-being can be hardly found in cities filled with just concrete jungles, mostly appearing the same, the
first
 group says.
On the other hand
, others feel that
town-planners
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 should give priority to
more
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 pressing demands of the
city
 dwellers than
on
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beauty
.
This
 means priority needs of the urban population have to be addressed, and for
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 the available space of the cities should be utilized in the most rational way. To be clearer,
instead
 of wasting a sizeable area of cities for constructing parks and gardens, it can be utilized to build schools, colleges and hospitals, which would benefit more
number of
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residents. In my opinion, the primary function of a
city
 is to satisfy the needs of its residents.
Therefore
, when designing a
city
, more focus should be given to its functionality than its
beauty
. To conclude, it is clear that both the aspects:
beauty
 and functionality have to be considered before planning a
city
.
However
, I feel the
second
 option weighs more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Cultural heritage
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban planning
  • Sustainable development
  • Psychological well-being
  • Economic growth
  • Tourism industry
  • Architectural marvels
  • Public spaces
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial hubs
  • Green spaces
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