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These days people are using the Internet for shopping, work and to communicate with others without the need for face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era, the
internet
 is enormously used by
people
 not only for marketing and communication but
also
 for occupational tasks.
This
 essay is intended to analyze the positive and negative effects of the
internet
.In my ,opinion the benefits of the
internet
 outweigh its shortcomings. On the positive side,
Internet
 has made life easier as it helps in saving time and money.In other ,words
people
 don't need to travel to their offices and work can be done from their home in a comfortable vicinity
Consequently
,fuel and energy consumption is
also
 reduced to a great extent
thus
,environmental pollution is decreased .
In addition
,communication has become effortless for individuals,they can easily communicate with each other in less time because online platform is readily available that consumes minimum charges too.
For instance
,in the scenario of lockdown during the Covid pandemic,citizens were inclined towards working and shopping through online platforms that were conveniently available which could be either medicine,grocery and perishable products were easily delivered at the doorstep via online applications
such
 as Dvago,Zomato,Dawaai.pk or food panda etc. On the downside, the
internet
 has promoted negative effects on physical and mental health due to a
sedantry
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sedentary
 lifestyle with minimum physical activity.Adults, as well as children, have become addicted to screening
that is
 causing the hazardous effect on their cornea and can weaken their eyesight.
Moreover
,
people
 are suffering from depression and boredom due to loss of connection with real-life
people
 and struggling with stress because of online shopping.To elucidate,in recent times my cousin ordered electronic kitchen equipment which was received as damaged and in not working condition. Wherein,it became a stressful task for him to exchange and proved as a waste of money. To sum
,
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Internet
 usage has both merits and demerits ,but the cons are definitely more than the pros.
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