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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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It is true that there are some
people
 who do not want to live far from their
hometown
. In
this
 essay, the causes
for
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this
 phenomenon will be analyzed.
Besides
 that, some advantages and disadvantages should be provided as well. Some
people
 have the tendency to spend their life
to live
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 near their
hometown
 because of two main reasons.
First
, when
people
 live in an area
that
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 they were born and grew up, they may have a lot of beautiful memory in there.
Therefore
, when
thay
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they
 move to
other area
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, they can miss their
hometown
 as well as their family members. The
second
 reason is that they might
do
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not want to change their life and start at the
begining
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beginning
to
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live
at
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 a new place
that is
 not familiar
with
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 them.
For example
, if
people
 move to a new place, they need to alter their house, make new friends and new neighbours and
also
 find a new job. It can be a serious problem
with
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 some
people
. In my opinion,
this
 phenomenon can
brings
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 some advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, living close to the
hometown
 can create some benefits for some
people
.
For instance
, they can live near their family so they can spend time
on
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taking care of the
family's
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 members.
Beside
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 that, when
people
 have to deal with some problems in their lives, they can get help easily from their family and friends or neighbours.
On the other hand
, living near
hometown
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 can limit
people
 not to
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 other knowledge and culture. It is believed that if some
people
 like travelling, they can study and find out more information about other new places over the world. In conclusion, it seems to me that some
people
 who like to live near home town should spend more time
to travel
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 and
explore
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 some new places.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Settlement
  • Hometown
  • Roots
  • Community
  • Emotional attachment
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Social network
  • Bond
  • Safety
  • Proximity
  • Support system
  • Heritage
  • Limited options
  • Risk aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Unfamiliarity
  • Exploration
  • Adventurous spirit
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