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Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport. However, it is no longer the main form of transport.  What are the reasons?  What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population?

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Nowadays, most people prefer to drive or take automotive vehicles than ride bicycles, despite understanding that it is a healthy and eco-friendly choice. In
this
 essay, I’ll cover the reasons and some measures to encourage its use. The main reason is that individuals leading a fast-paced life focus more on efficiency, often ignoring the long-term environmental benefits or their own health.
For example
, it only takes less than two hours to fly from one city to almost anyone in China. But if riding a bike, one may spend several days, and even months.
Also
, easier access to cars or buses make it possible to discard bikes, due to the rapid development of the transportation industry.
Besides
, laziness is a natural and intrinsic trait of humans and
thus
 automotive vehicles have gradually become our
first
 choice rather than manual bicycles thanks to their labour-saving. There are some measures to motivate more people to use
this
 environmentally friendly mode of transport again.
First
 of all, governments should advocate the design and development of average-sized and small cities rather than only metropolis, where it will be possible for citizens to bike from their homes to the workplace or school within 20 minutes, an acceptable time.
Additionally
, private companies could develop the shared-bike project, which has been in use in many cities, since it is very convenient for people to bike to some short-distance destinations.  In conclusion, the reason that a larger population gives up bicycles is that automotive vehicles are more efficient and satisfied with human needs.
However
,
this
 does not mean that it is a worthy behaviour and
instead
 we can take steps to embrace it again,
such
 as designing small and medium-sized urban areas and initiating shared-bike schemes.
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