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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online?

#people
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huge
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number of
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population has risen
of
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 online shopping.
This
 is all because of new
advance
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 technology. Following the sentence will
be explain
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 merits and demerits. On the one hand,it will save
consumption
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the consumption
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 of time.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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,do not have to go
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at
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a
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particular
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a particular
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 shop.
For instance
,If they like Korean brand clothes so no need to go there,they can buy
from
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online.
secondly
,
enterprise
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the enterprise
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 will have benefits.
For example
,
company
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the company
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 will get
more
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explore to
whole
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the whole
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 nation.When large numbers of
consumer
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consumers
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inclined
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which
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it
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leads to
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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profit
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the profit
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of
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for
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 entrepreneurs.
On the other hand
,it has drawbacks too. product may be unexpected or unsatisfactory from the pictures as it was given in online.In case,if they have bought 36 'M' size clothes and
other country size
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another country size
other country sizes
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 will be
little
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a little
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 bit different so
same
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the same
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 size won't get.And another reason is that it's expensive because it charges for shipping and
weight
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the weight
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 of clothes etc... So concluding the statement,
that
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 as per my perspective,it has more useful for saving time and energy.As well as it
also
 gives dissatisfaction too.so for that,rather
search
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searches
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 good shopping online and or to get great things better go at
particular
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a particular
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 shop.
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