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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the fuel cost. Do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #fuel #cost
Some individuals believe that raising the cost of
fuel
 is the most effective method
to
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solving
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 the world's environmental problems. While I accept that
this
 policy is good to some extent, I believe it is not the best because there are much better measures to reduce environmental issues. On the one hand, increasing the price of fossil fuels may have a good impact. To be more specific, higher
fuel
 costs may help in the reduction of air pollution and
the
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carbon footprint. If the price of gasoline rose, people would use public transportation
instead
 of driving their own vehicles, perhaps lowering the rate of air pollution.
On the other hand
, an increase in
fuel
 prices can be said to be a radical solution
for
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 the
environment
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 problems. Increasing
fuel
 prices will place a significant financial burden on the poor, particularly those living in impoverished countries.
Besides
 raising
fuel
 prices, another suggested solution is to encourage renewable energy sources. Because they release fewer greenhouse gasses, renewable energy sources are
also
 useful in solving the world's environmental issues. To sum up,
although
 raising the price of gasoline may appear to be a viable solution to the different worldwide environmental challenges, it is far from practical.
Instead
, the emphasis should be on decreasing deforestation and encouraging people to plant more trees. Subsidies must
also
 be provided to encourage the use of environmentally friendly automobiles.
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