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Today, many people do not realize how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn wore about the importance of the natural world?

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 of
people
 do not appreciate natural surroundings and do not understand their significance. In
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reasons
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the reasons
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of
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irresponsibility
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the irresponsibility
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 of
people
 to our living world and the ways to make
people
 notice the importance of
natural
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the natural
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 world.
People
 have been using different natural resources for their convenience since ancient times.
For instance
, the production of paper from the trees or the utilization of
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fossil fuels
such
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as
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us
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 the coals and the natural gases to provide heat. The population accustom to always getting and taking the recurses from the flora since they believe that everything belongs to them.
Furthermore
, the needs of the population increase with the development of the technologies.
However
,
selfishness
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the selfishness
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 of the nation
lead
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leads
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 to the pollution of our environment and reduction of the plenty stuffs
such
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our
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us
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as
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 forests and lakes.
For example
, one of the largest lakes Aral Sea in Kazakhstan is disappearing. It decreased approximately by 50
percent
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per cent
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.
People
 will notice the condition of the land if there will be more advertisements
such
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as
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us
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 the videos and the banners about
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nature. If
person
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a person
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see
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sees
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 the pollution of nature every day on TV or on
banner
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a banner
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 while walking,
then
 he will think about the condition of the environment constantly.
Moreover
, they should spend one day of each
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month
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moth
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month
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to take
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 care of the flora and teach kids to do that from their childhood. In conclusion, nowadays a lot of
citizenries
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citizens
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 do not pay attention to the state of the Earth.
However
, as long as each person will begin to make
own
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their own
his own
her own
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 contribution to
the
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nature protection the situation will
be
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change
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changed
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.
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