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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think it is essential to learn history. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It is considered by some people that dedicating
time
 to researching
history
 is necessary to know our
history
 while there are others who think that it is meaningless. Studying improves your understanding of your current national behaviour,
however
, applying the
time
 expended on historically
research
 can be used to generate new technological improvements. I believe that it is important to focalize our efforts on researching the future and make
history
 a secondary matter. On the one hand, historical information can lend us a path that will make it possible to know ourselves better and not lose traditions. Generally, countries are not a recent idea and they had to go through their own development. Because of it, it is important to maintain
research
 that will lend you the possibility of knowing
this
 path and improve
our
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 understanding of our own culture.
For example
, Spain had had different invasions over the years from different sources, like the Alandalus' one, footprinting our culture and moulding our actual shape.
On the other hand
, moving forward is necessary and it takes
time
 to do it. Even if
history
 is necessary to know ourselves, developing our society and
research
 towards an easier kind of life is a necessity because it reduces harmful problems that can be predicted or reduced because of the improvements. One clear example is the reduced
time
 that took for the pharmaceutics to develop a vaccine to fight covid-19, saving millions of lives thanks to it. In my opinion, studying
history
 is necessary if you do not want to lose your own path, but due to the number of dangerous problems that can be occurring currently, scientifical
research
 and social
research
 are more important and overweight them clearly.
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