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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and give any relavent examples from your own knowledge or experienc.

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A day without an
internet
 is like a day without the food. We all should agree that, after the invention of the
internet
, the world has become more convenient.
This
 essay discusses how the
internet
 has changed the world in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, everything is related to the
internet
 in
this
 fast-moving world. The country cannot operate without the
Internet
. Starting from traffic sig
nals
Correct your spelling
nails
, the stock market, defence technologies, communications, and Social media, everything is connected to the
internet
.
For example
, all overseas communication is made through some social media just by paying for the
internet
. The online market is developed through the
internet
 which is more convenient for all age groups to get what they need on their doorstep.
Moreover
, overseas products were
also
 delivered to our doorstep quickly.
Furthermore
, the
Internet
 plays an important role in the education system. After COVID, so many courses have been made online, which opens a gate to all age groups to learn and get certified. The
internet
 connects local and overseas students and teachers through Classroom, Google Meet, zoom and other online education apps which allow them to share any study materials.
For instance
, an amputee Indian student is interested in learning Comic art, but the course is available only abroad where he cannot travel, but the
internet
 made that easy for him to learn from his home. With the help of the
internet
, all the researchers were able to find an accurate solution and able to share their opinion overseas. In conclusion, from communication and shopping to education and entertainment, the
internet
 has played a very important role, which made our life very easy.
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task achievement
Ensure that all parts of the question are addressed fully. You could elaborate more on some points to give a more complete response.
coherence cohesion
Don't break words between lines to ensure readability. For example, 'traffic sig nals' should be 'traffic signals'.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
The main points are supported with relevant examples and sufficient detail. The examples you provided significantly strengthen your argument.

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